Posts tagged scene developement

Writer’s Wednesday

Whose telling your current WIP?

Every writer has an opinion on point of view (POV).  There are those I call the purist, those who believe we can only use one pov per story, at the opposite end is the writer who includes everyone’s pov.  I feel pov needs to be determined by the writer and story. 

Personally, I will never write in the first person.  I don’t write like that.  Also, I will generally have at least two pov’s – the heroine and hero – depending on the genre up to three – the bad guy in my suspense.  I like to use the heroine and hero pov’s but that doesn’t mean every writer does. 

What is important – determine your pov at the beginning of your book and then stick with it!  No matter what.  I just finished a book which introduced a new pov in the last twenty pages.  It actually pulled from the tension, in my opinion, instead of adding to it.  I relate to this desire. In Treasure Hunt, I really wanted to use the ‘bad’ guy’s pov for the big fight scene.  But since we hadn’t visited his head before, I had to stick with what I had.  Sometimes, it requires a lot more effort to stay true to your selected pov but you’ll end up with a stronger scene.

The key to pov…..make it deep.  How do you do that?

Dev elope a unique voice for each POV.  No two people sound, think, or act alike.  Your pov should be as individual as the character it represents.  For instance, guys don’t look at things the same way as women.  Your hero probably would not notice things in a room your heroine would.  If he walks into a room and notices the color of the curtains, how many pillows are on the couch, and the little trinkets set around you need to give him a reason.  He’s a cop, etc.  Still even then his internal voice would be different than a woman’s.  For example, the curtains would be off white not eggshell.  Developing voice is key regardless of the number of pov’s or how often you switch. 

One way to establish a voice is to set the mood of your character.  Take a scene and rewrite it three ways – as if everything about the scene infuriates your character, then as if it is breaking your characters’ heart, and then as if he/she is scared.  Do this for all your pov characters.  Find out how they will act differently from one other.  You should be able to read each scene from each character and instantly tell who it is without an introduction.  For example in the heartbreaking scene, the heroine may walk in crying where the hero walks in cursing.  This example is very cliché so another thing to work on is how they portray these typical situations in a unique way.

Next add dept to your POV.  Here is an exercise to use especially for those pivotal scenes.  Take the scene from your current WIP that you want to kick up and tell the same scene from someone else’s POV.  By seeing the same scene from someone else’s eyes you can see how your character looks – acts.  Even if your scene has your character alone, for this exercise rewrite from the POV of  the proverbial fly on the wall.  This will really make you concentrate on the characters action because the fly does not have mind reading ability so your characters action’s needs to portray the mood.  Take the observation and weave them into the scene.

You alone know how many or how few pov’s you need in your story.  But remember the more pov’s or the fewer pov’s doesn’t make a great book – the depth and voice of the pov’s does.

Recommended reading:

Mastering Point of View by Sherri Szeman.  This book shows you how to use pov to reveal or obscure your character’s movtivation and how to handle multiple povs by developing unique voices.

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Writer’s Wednesday

I think the subject of hooks is one of importance and is covered in great detail.  However, one thing I’ve found missing from the workshops and articles concerning the end hook (chapter or scene) is the need to make it as specific as possible for YOUR book.  Opening hooks can be more general.  Look at these three examples…

Jill froze, the pool of blood slowly crept across the cement

Jill froze, as Victor’s  smile revealed fangs

Jill froze when Cain walked into the room – nude 

All three would make nice opening sentences – all start with a bang.  The first one would throw your character right in the middle for action of the suspense, the second would work for a paranormal and the third for a romance.  But for a concluding hook they tend to lean a little more on the weak side, because they lack individuality – a few words changed and Jill has jumped to a different genre and different situation.  To make these work as solid ending hooks your set-up or lead in has to be really strong even then… 

Like for the first one, if you have Jill creeping around an abandoned warehouse, the power is out so she only has the weak light of her flashlight.   She walks rounds the wooden crates. Then your hook line – Jill froze, the pool of blood slowly crept across the cement.  But even then the hook is weak.  The reader is expecting something….so why not surprise them?  I mean that is the purpose of a scene or chapter hook. 

With our example the ‘surprise’ factor is semi-expected and with a few word changes the hook line works for three different genres listed above.  So how do you write a hook that is just for your story?

First, when you set up the scene as I did with Jill in the warehouse, take a minute and brain storm – what are some expected things I could have happen?

Make a list – DON’T limit yourself…go from silly to bizarre.  Look at your list keeping in mind what you need to happen, for example, I needed Jill scared, I needed her prompted to begin a full investigation into the history of warehouse.  Now finding a dead body would work…it would have to be recent for the pool of blood.  But then why isn’t she going to call the cops?  Cops would ruin my plot – they are so nosey.  It could be my hero –injured.  That would be okay but why is she going to investigate? 

So what to do?  The set-up remains the same but instead of seeing a pool of blood…

Jill rounded the corner and heard the mutter of muffled voices.  Switching off the flashlight, she bent down and crawled toward the noise.  The hard concrete bruising her knees and hands. 

“Shut-up.”  A male voice commanded.  “I heard someone.”

“Ye be hearing ghosts.”  Another man laugh.  “Those you killed paying a visit.”

Jill drew a breath of the stale musky air and silently wedged herself between two crates.  Faint moonlight from the sky dome created shadows of the men talking.  It was several long unsettling minutes before the light caught the big gold signet ring on the man’s right hand.

“Lucas,” her mind screamed.

Now the reader knows Lucas is her twin brother who supposedly died three years ago.  Now hopefully this ‘hook’ will have the reader ‘hooked’ – is it really her brother or someone wearing his ring?  And they will continue to read. 

The first hook with the blood, Jill was going to find Lucas’ ring in the blood in the opening of the next chapter.  So I reached the goal with both – her wondering if her brother is alive or if she has stumbled on his killer.  She begins exploring the warehouse.

When creating chapter hooks, play with your options, explore!  Be creative….

Here are some great articles on writing opening hooks.

Open your book with a hook – by Barbara Dawson Smith http://www.barbaradawsonsmith.com/writing%20hooks.htm

Writing Hooks not crooks – by Kat Feete http://fmwriters.com/Visionback/Issue27/writinghooks.htm

What are some of your favorite opening and chapter hooks?

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Finally Finished Friday

My first finally finished for 2010 is my first fill length story (I usually do novellas) WOO HOO.  But now it’s time to move on.

Why is the story I write in my in the shower always better than the one I type at my computer?  Someone posted this question on twitter yesterday, I nodded at my computer screen in agreement.  I can’t tell you how many times I have started a story…it was perfect in my head and then I wrote it.  The characters who were so alive in my head were flat and lacked depth on the paper.  The story line that made my heart race with excitement was boring and filled with clichés.  

So after repeatedly trying to write in the shower and it not working (yes, I needed to give it repeated tries) I have come to realize that I need to take the idea and put it to some serious testing before I start to write it.

I have finally finished my current WIP – I’m ready to start submitting it.  I’ve had characters showering with me for about the last three weeks.  It’s time to move them out of the shower and on to the paper.  So how do I do this?   I put them through their paces…

First, I sketch out the major events.  This gives me a map—or else the characters drive me into every dead end possible.

1. At the start of my book, what distinguishes my protagonist from other people? What central strength does he/she have? How does this strength get him/her into trouble?

2. When the novel opens, what is s/he on the brink of doing? Why does he/she say she’s going to do this? What does this action represent for the protagonist?

3. What external situation will require the protagonist’s participation throughout the course of the book? How does this connect with #2? Does it help or interfere? Can you build in a deadline for extra tension?

4. What is the protagonist’s goal for the time the book covers? How does this connect with the external situation? Or does the external situation divert the protagonist from his/her goal? Why does the protagonist SAY he/she wants the goal? Is there a deeper motivation as yet unknown to him/her?

5. What problem (external conflict) does the external situation present? How can the protagonist eventually resolve that conflict?

6. List at least three obstacles in the way of her resolving this conflict. Make one an internal obstacle/conflict.

7. How will the protagonist grow because of confronting these obstacles?

8. What do I want to happen at the end of the book?

9. What will have to happen to the protagonist against his/her will to make my ending come about?

I use question #2 to craft an opening scene that involves the reader right away. A character on the brink of some action provides a lot of forward momentum. That action can involve the reader in the external situation described in 3, and/or be in pursuit of the goal I defined in 4. If it happens, what unforeseen consequences does it have?

I build my story from these nine questions.  If my characters are cardboard or my story weak, I’m unable to answer these questions.  I have found to be able to write – finally finished at the end of a story – regardless of length, it has to hold up to these nine questions. 

So what have you finished this new year?

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Writer’s Wednesday

Using your Senses

Today is a writing exercise.  As a writer, I believe my craft must always be worked on.  I don’t I’ll ever hit a stride where I can go…”I have this writing thing.  There is no room for improvement.” One think I work on is including details that include other senses besides sight.  The five senses are our gateway to the world. Without them, we couldn’t interact with anything around us.

What your character is seeing is the easiest thing to describe or convey to your reader.  If you say something is yellow everyone is going to be able to see that.  You could get really detailed with ‘sunny yellow’ or ‘pale yellow’ or ‘lemon yellow’ but even just yellow will invoke an image in your readers mind.

Here is basic jumping point we’re going to build on…

Jillian walked into the room. She could smell food cooking. A picture hung over the fireplace. She made a sound and took step closer to the picture.

What exactly does she see?  

Jillian critically surveyed the pristine room.  It was void of dust, clutter, or anything else that would make it welcoming.  Dark cherry tables anchored the ends of a pale pink couch.  A round tan braided rug was perfectly placed between the two chairs.  Four small lamps with beaded shades casted muted shadows along the perimeter of the room. What she kept returning to was the picture resting on the fireplace mantle.  Its figures lit by the flickering flame below it. It was of a picture of her mother and a man whom she assumed was her father.  Her mother held a small baby and the man was positioned behind them, encasing them both of in his thick strong arms.

Sounds are the second easiest to describe.  We all know what a car horn sounds like, or a baby crying or a dog barking.  Yet, sounds are one of the things I need to remind myself to include. 

In the sample above, I have improved the description.  Since it Jillian first time entering the room I included more than a causal description.  In my general outline I have Jillian making a sound. 

What kind of sound?  Is it a gasp?  Was a chuckle?  Was it a cry?  All three of these sounds would affect the mood of this paragraph.  If she  chuckles, then the reader gets a warm fuzzy from the description but if she gasp then the reader senses distress.  

Jillian’s lips quivered as muted cry escaped her lungs.  It hadn’t been loud but in the stifling silence, it echoed off the room’s walls surrounding her.  There would be no tears, she told herself as she stepped closer to the picture. 

 In writing, you want to speak to your readers’ senses so they can interact with YOUR world.  By including some sound and the lack of sound, I create a clearer picture of where my character is.  My reader feels now what Jillian does.

The wording in of the smells in my original paragraph is vague. It gives us an idea of the setting, but it doesn’t REALLY engage our senses. When I wrote the outline I include the vague detail because I wanted to remember to include smells.  Her grandmother is in the kitchen cooking…a grandmother she doesn’t remember.  Are the smells offering her comfort or are the setting her on edge?  Are they things she likes?  Can she even tell what they are?

Jillian’s stomach rolled in protest to the sight before her and the heavy odor of bacon frying in the kitchen.  The picture had to be a lie. 

I love bacon but in this description it takes a different meaning adding to my mood.  Here is the entire paragraph after the added detail.

Jillian critically surveyed the pristine room.  It was void of dust, clutter, or anything else that would make it welcoming.  Dark cherry tables anchored the ends of a pale pink couch.  A round tan braided rug was perfectly placed between the two chairs.  Four small lamps with beaded shades casted muted shadows along the perimeter of the room.

What she kept returning to was the picture resting on the fireplace mantle.  Its figures lit by the flickering flame below it. It was of a picture of her mother and a man whom she assumed was her father.  Her mother held a small baby and the man was positioned behind them, encasing them both of in his thick strong arms.  Jillian’s lips quivered as muted cry escaped her lungs.  It hadn’t been loud but in the stifling silence, it echoed off the room’s walls surrounding her.  There would be no tears, she told herself as she stepped closer to the picture.  Jillian’s stomach rolled in protest to the sight before her and the heavy odor of bacon frying in the kitchen.  The picture had to be a lie. 

In this new paragraph, our senses are fully engaged. We can imagine the smell of bacon and eggs and perhaps even hear it sizzling. We can see the painting and the firelight, and we can feel the heavy, scratchy wool. We hear the Jillian’s cries and know what causes it.

When you write, speak to the senses. By doing so, you’ll give your readers everything they need to enter your world!

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Writer’s Wednesday

Romance with a bang…what does that mean?

I was part of a promotion blog a couple of weeks ago and posted that question to the loop.  Since that is my ‘brand’ so to speak I was curious what it meant to readers.   What was their bang?

Here are some of the responses: 

            The kiss or kill moment.  When the hero/heroine are either going to kiss or kill each other.

            The first meeting.  The chemistry that kicks in at the initial meeting.

            When they realize that there is more than ‘just’ lust between them.  The individual scenes.

            The HEA ending.  After the hero/heroine struggled and overcame. 

            I’m for the instant love or lust.

The list continued but I think you get the idea.  Now when I said I write romance with a bang I was referring to the suspense element.  The book I was prompting that day (The Gamble) actually had all the above included so I could post different scenes from the story that illustrated their ‘bang.’ 

I wondered what would happen if I didn’t have a kiss or kill moment?  Would my romance with a bang be romance that popped instead?  

When writing a story, in any genre, it’s important to keep the bang in mind with each scene.  I’ve read several books that have climax moments that blow your socks off but as a whole the book was just okay or boring. 

Why?

Because the ‘bang’ moments leading up to the climax popped. 

As a reader what are some bang moments for you when you read a book?  As a writer how do you keep the bang throughout your book?

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Writer’s Wednesday

All  Fools Day

Writers Wednesday….Tricking the Reader…

Every story has a climax, when something has to be resolved.  But if you write mystery, suspense, thrillers or any number of other genre that requires the character to gather skills, clues, or popcorn J then you are presented with the task of developing clues and possibly red herrings.  

Because clues are the road map for the reader how well you weave them into your story will impact how much the reader enjoys the trip to the climax.  Now you can take the direct approach, ‘hey reader this is the bad guy, he will fight the good guy at the end, ‘on page two or you can cloak your bad guy in ‘misdirection.’  Giving the reader see tiny glimpses of the real threat.  Again, a lot will have to do with the type of story you are writing. 

When developing your story, either as a plotter or panters, you need to remember to give your readers enough clues that they stay on the right path without overplaying your hand. 

What are some of the ways you keep the reader on track without doing it?

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Writer’s Wednesday

Some of the latest romances I’ve read seems like the hero is no more than a kissing post for the heroine.  Not that anything is wrong with kissing and much more.  But I’ve found myself wondering what is it about the guy that makes the heroine find him attractive.  He seems one dimensional to me.  I think a lot of this is related to the popular ‘dark’ hero.  Which again, I don’t have a problem with as long as he has motivation.  But I’ve found a lot of the dark heroes sort of hang out, available for quick sex and wait for the heroine to solve the dilemma

So what make a good hero – dark or otherwise?   The next four weeks, I’m going to post segments from a workshop I lead at a writer’s conference on developing the ultimate hero.  I mean as romance writer’s isn’t our goal to have the reader fall in love with hero, or at least understand why the heroine is?

Week #1 – What emotions drive your Hero?

There are over 36 emotions  the average person feels in any given day.  So if your hero bounces back and forth from angry to horny, there is probably room for development.

One of emotions, I think most writers try to bestow on their hero is apathy.  I mean who doesn’t want a Rhett Butler type of hero, “My dear, I don’t give a damn.”    Because apathy is the lack of emotion, I think it’s one of the hardest to express well. 

Things to avoid when developing apathy/indifference toward a situation:

                1.  A hero that comes across as hard or cruel both of which are emotions and affect the reader differently than apathy

                2.  Avoid making your hero unlikeable because they’re indifferent to the situation at hand.

                3.  The hardest – that your hero doesn’t come across as just bored with the situation.  Rhett wasn’t bored.

Key things to remember when developing apathy/indifference in your hero:

1.  DON’T MAKE HIM DULL.  An apathetic character in NOT boring.  He might be baffling, frustrating, or pathological but never boring!

                2.  Make the reason for his indifference clear to the reader. 

 

Examples:

                Bad ~

                                John went to his boring job every day, Monday through Friday, from 9 to 5.  He punched the time clock.  He worked.  He ate lunch at noon, a bologna sandwich on white bread.  He got home by 5:30 where his wife was waiting with meatloaf.

                Yup, this is bad because it’s BORING! 

                Good ~ from “Orientation” by Daniel Orozco

Kevin Howard sits in that cubicle over there.  Every day, he is here by 7:32.  Every day, he eats natural peanut butter on rye bread.  He is also a serial killer, the one they call the Carper Cutter, responsible for the mutilations across town.  We’re not suppose to know so don’t let on.

Here the narrator with irony lets the reader in on some secrets.  They start off as mundane and become more bizarre, but the tone doesn’t change.  The narrator is indifferent to what he is sharing even though the reader is horrified.

This week’s challenge  ~ review a work in progress and count how many different emotions your hero experiences.  Is it enough to make him multi-dimensional?  If not pick one key emotion that will surprise the reader.  Then weave it into your hero’s makeup. 

Also if you’re interested I do have the full worksheet for emotions that I handed out during the presentation that I’d be willing to e-mail you.  Just drop me a note!

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Writing Wednesday…

 What is unique about that?

 

 

 

The goal of every writer is to submerge the reader into the world they have created.  Last week’s post was on using setting as a secondary character.  A key factor to having your reader total immersed in your story is they need to know where they are.  Many writers focus solely on a character appearance and scent (cologne, perfume, shampoo, etc).

Every setting has something that makes it different and as a writer we need to show the reader what that difference is.   For instance, if five people go to a clearing in the woods and they are asked to list seven smell and sounds.  The list will be very different one might say an annoying bird while another has the chatter of a squirrel and a third the buzz of a bug. 

Pick a scene from your current WIP you feel is lacking the pull to engulf the reader. 

 Ask yourself:

(1)  Where is this scene set?

(2)   What are some of the smells – list a couple positive AND negative. 

            (3)   What does your character hear?  Try to avoid the common or be really specific.  If it’s a show, name it.

After you have listed a couple of new key scene details, add one or two them.  The results will be a clearer picture for your reader. 

If you have one place that is a reoccurring location, it might be beneficial to visit it.  Spend some time with the intention of picking out the different. In a short story, I wrote – Racing Through Love – I went to a motorcycle shop and sat.  My brother-in-law races motorcycles, so I had been there numerous times but I went this time looking for sounds besides an air compressor.  I was amazed at how many smells and sounds I had never noticed before.  Many of which found their way into my story.

A reader enjoys a story that gives them full access to the world the characters live in.  Have fun and share the unique with them

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